Fatima Fakier Deria
Sea Views
She looked out at the panoramic views over Falmouth bay wondering about the people below, as tourists jostled for better views she remained still and calm taking in the view.
She could see a rescue helicopter in the distance with a package hanging from its line. She watched as tug boats towed large boats out to sea, everything looked calm and peaceful. Compared to the busy museum below where children ran freely below boats leaving their parents hot on their tails telling them not to touch.
She wondered how long she could remain stood in this serenity away from the chaos below.
Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The idea is to write a short story of 100 words based on the photo prompt (above).
To read stories of 100 words based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.
This piece of flash fiction is about The National Maritime museum, that has a huge tower with panoramic views
A Story About A Girl 
Heads up – I think you meant panoramic in the first line not panama. Nice descriptive story, I sensed her peace.
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thanks maybe I had better go back and edit and change the spellings.
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Sounds like an interesting visit! I take it the woman waiting was in a wheel chair and not able to push herself around?
I hope you don’t mind a little critique, but this sentence has me puzzled:
Compared to the business museum below where children ran freely below boats leaving their parents hot on their tails telling them not to touch.
A business museum? You mean a nautical museum, right?
And how can children run below the boats? Are the boats hanging?
Perhaps you could say, “children ran (or dashed) freely between the boats on display, with parents hot on their tails, etc…”
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thanks or your feed back, maybe I should learn to read before I press the send button! crazy end of week so copied and pasted!
The Museum has a lot of boats which you can go up to / get on look at….
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Dear Claire,
I’d always rather watch the chaos than be in the midst of it. I liked that feeling of peace even if it might be temporary.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I have to agree some sentences were a little confusing but I, too, like the feeling of being able to watch from a distance and not be part of the cacophony…
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Thanks for the feedback, 🙂
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I got it in the end, and enjoyed the differing scenes
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Hey,
Yeah it sounds like it wasn’t my best.
Thanks for the feedback though
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