I Usually enjoy my creative writing class, but over the last two weeks we have been doing editing and dialogue, which has left me stressed out about my WIP 😦 part of me is like just write and sort out later but it doesn’t work like that does it! Plus I could of possibly been writing dialogue wrong all my life JOY!
On the positive side, I thought I would share something that I wrote as homework.
My words were: Rainbow, Corn Beef, Elephant, Custard and Crystal
“You are going on holiday and arrive at the airport check-in desk. The person in front of you is repacking their suitcase when you see an unusal and suspicious item in their luggage
With today’s heightened security at airports I was keen to get a closer look, there was no point screaming and shouting if it turned out to be nothing. Plus I was sure they had dogs and x-ray machines to spot these sorts of things. As I tried to edge closer to see I was getting funny looks from people like I was trying to push in or something? There was an big Elephant in the room and I seemed to be the only one who was aware of it. Everyone else was busy discussing if they wanted Corn Beef or cheese sandwiches and whether they wanted Custard on their desert’s or not. This was airline food for crying out loud did it matter? As the women repacked her bag I noticed a Rainbow coloured teddy had been missed that was laying on the floor behind her case, this was my chance as I tried to walk over as casual as possible bending down to pick up the teddy the lady looked at me surprised with my sudden urge to help her after I had been watching her struggle for the past five minutes at least. The teddy felt heavier than I would have expected weighing it up in my hands I looked at her and her face began to drop as she realised what I was thinking. My husband gets cross with me, he says that I am never off the clock and maybe one day I should leave my detective inspector hat at home along with my ID card. But I guess this time he was wrong because who knows where those uncut Crystals would of ended up if I hadn’t spotted the shiny object in the lining of her suitcase, poor teddy though having his insides taken out like that.”
I woke suddenly as I heard a crash coming from somewhere, I was scared, alone and I couldn’t see anything but darkness. I began to shake as I pulled the covers up toward my chin, frozen with fear was this end had someone let slip where I was? maybe if I stayed very still curled in a ball and held my breath I’d be safe.
As the sun began to rise I started to wonder,
creeping from hiding place,
I felt so stiff from being curled up so tight maybe if I just looked out of the window…
PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
I missed last week for various reasons, so I hope this works out okay!
Friday Fictioners is hosted by Rochelle on her blog, so make sure you pop by to join and read her works.
Witness by Caroline Mitchell
My rating: 5 of 5 stars
I wasn’t sure what I would make of this book after reading another one of Caroline’s earlier books that I didn’t hate but didn’t really enjoy, but this one took me pleasantly by surprise! As I kept checking my kindle as to how much I had left to go!
How far would you go to escape someone?
How far would you to protect your family from that same person?
At time I felt a bit uncomfortable reading the story but at other I felt like I was cheering the main character on.
I was left pleasantly satisfied, though I think I might need to go back and read the last couple of pages!!!
Definitly a 5/5 and I am glad I gave her a second chance.
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Jess asked for volunteers to write something for her blog, click the link to find my attempt and check out her blog too Jess’ blog
Hey fellow worriers
I think this month’s topic is very apt as I continue to try and write a book with no one to ask for answers (no one I dare ask)
What is the weirdest/coolest thing you ever had to research for your story?
I wouldn’t say it’s cool but I have spent endless hours researching Murder, and ID of dead bodies and my current favorite missing persons, though a programme on the BBC recently helped with that, when I typed in the right word hey presto and where I had previously been stopped because I am not a member of the police force it appears if you google the right thing then you don’t need to be.
I am also an avid readers of Rebecca Bradley’s blog on police procedure and when I started writing an interview scene I went back to check it was right..
Someone once said just write the damn story and go back and check that it is right afterwards.. and where as what I have written procedure is right at the moment who knows if it will be when I get to the dreaded editing stage!
I was told that if you ask Siri where can I hide a dead body it’s responses are slightly amusing (small things)
The thing I am musing about most at the moment other than damn story lines and plot holes is why are competitions so expensive to enter? £15!!! one the other day.
it’s like if you don’t have loads of money, you can go to writing events / courses as some of them cost an arm and a leg! And you can’t enter competitions for the same reason. I guess I am just a struggling writer going no where fast.
When a dead body is found washed up in the river Trent, DI Chris Jackson and his new partner DS Jennifer Garner are called to investigate. What seems like an open and shut suicide case, suddenly becomes more complex when the team are made aware of a boy who was found on the same night wondering the streets of Nottingham. The case becomes more complex and DS Garner begins to question one of her past cases and wonders if everything did end or did she miss a huge part of the jigsaw?
From the best seller author of New Beginnings comes a tale of murder, prostitution and the things we do for love.
Back to creative writing today which I quite enjoyed 🙂 John our tutor gave us a task of randomly picking out words from a dictionary and also gave us a beginning and a middle of a story, we then had to create something. I think my practice at Rochelle’s Friday Fictioner’s really helped today, well maybe not trying to get the words in but being able to keep stuff short.
My words were after John shuffled them were
Masquerade, Chaste and Palliate
Looking out of the window, she saw Sam crossing the bridge
she couldn’t help thinking he was trying to Masquerade hiding from who he really was. What was he so afraid and scared of? who cared what people thought of him? it wasn’t like people were Chaste these days. With his parents being from a religious background they had tried to Palliate him but his sexuality wasn’t an illness it was who he was. I watched as he greeted people in the street, they were parent’s of someone to, but they ran to meet him to be consumed by his aura, while his parents watched on in disgust.
the ending should of been other people’s parents ran to meet them, not mine! but I decided to change it slightly!
We have been set a challenge for homework, again using five random words. We had two scenarios
1 You are going on holiday and arrive at the airport check-in desk. The person in front of you is repacking their suitcase when you see an unusal and suspicious item in their luggage
2. You are doing your weekly shop in the local supermarket, when suddenly a women collapses in front of you, she gasps for breath as you kneel over her, and she whisper’s “he wasn’t there” then she loses consciousness
my words were: Corn Beef, Crystal, Elephant, Custard and Rainbow
So I’ll let you know 🙂